I don't normally post films in the story section, but because story was the main reason this project has been shelved unfinished for the last two years, I thought I would share the update.
I spent the last two weeks deleting most of the black frames where there was not enough animation to cover the audio and working out all the plot holes/filling them in with repaired shots (elements like the glowing light on the glove in later shots and the insertion of the glove falling and bouncing in front of the garbage cans), a cross-dissolve from the gray playground structure to the alien ship, and- mostly importantly- the excision of a good many shots that didnt' really add anything to whatever story was buried in there, despite being more recent and technically improved animation.
I don't know if it's good enough for a festival, but I'm mostly happy with it, especially after going to school and learning how to troubleshoot story issues and make things clearer. The feedback from other students was invaluable on our story assignments, and I was glad to be able to apply that knowledge to a film that never felt like it came together right.
Sorry about the link, here's a working one. Some things have been added to tackle the plot holes.
The story for the next film will be airtight before any pre-production work is done on it.
Man, I am not excellent at this...
THIS link, of the same film, which will come down "over my dead body", knock MDF, is much improved after a lot of great feedback and suggestions. At the moment I'm working on a "Director's Cut" version of it, which will have more of the original ending and something closer to a G-rating (less death, drug references, etc).
I hope you like it, for as long as it stays up, which will be "indefinitely" and "forever"
It's good to see BAS online again Don. I swear, this might be the one movie with more versions than Bladerunner. You should actually give them various names - you know, The Final Cut to cleverly denote the one that ends with decapitation, or something..
Ahahaha!!! Well, I got the idea to endlessly re-edit my films from listening to feed back. Everyone wants something different, so I'd make changes, upload it, someone didn't like something, took it down, made a few edits, put it back up again... I'm trying to come to a consensus where enough people are happy with it that it can stay in that form and it feels finished. Then maybe I'll submit it to festivals. Right now, though, I'm mostly just trying to gauge what's good and keep that, and build on it.
Oh man - filmmaking by committee? And worse yet, a random internet committee? Nothing good ever came of that kind of approach, only chaos. Chaos, I say!
Narrative is an extremely demanding discipline that requires a lot of sacrifices, and it can't be achieved by editing already-shot footage unless that footage was done with an eye toward it from the beginning. Just do what you do - your films want to be comedy skits with loose story lines. Sheesh, I can only imagine how damaging it would be if some higher-up suddenly declared all SNL skits had to conform to narrative structure! It would kill the spontaneity and everything that makes them funny. Those things work because they're totally anarchic and ignore the rules of narrative storytelling.
It is also my hope that someday I'll settle on one name. :P
As far as pleasing others- I've had no luck with submitting to festivals because of either the bad storytelling or subject matter. At this point, I'd be happy with something that got accepted- even if it had to be "sanitized" for a general audience. I suppose it's no surprise that I've been a professional editor... I like to clean things up by taking stuff away. The only thing that matters is presenting a clear and effective storyline. I was all "funny first" until going to school changed that. Now it's story, story, story!